Let’s suppose that Student X revised their Draft 1 into Draf…
Let’s suppose that Student X revised their Draft 1 into Draft 2. Explain why Draft 2 is more cohesive by applying concepts/principles from information structure theory. Draft 1. In the last several years, college costs have been rising so fast that they are now threatening the safeguard of democracy everywhere: an educated citizenry. Family incomes are increasing more slowly than tuition, and only children of the wealthiest families will be able to afford a college education if this trend continues. Knowledge and intellectual skills as well as wealth will stratify us at that point, and the presumptions of political access, economic opportunity, and social mobility that ensure the stability of healthy democratic societies will erode. Draft 2. In the last several years, college costs have been rising so fast that they are now threatening the safeguard of democracy everywhere: an educated citizenry. Tuition is increasing faster than family incomes, and if this trend continues, a college education will soon be affordable only for the children of the wealthiest families. At that point, we will be stratified not only by wealth but also by knowledge and intellectual skills, and this stratification will erode the presumptions of political access, economic opportunity, and social mobility that ensure the stability of healthy democratic societies.