At the end of Mr. Foster’s unit on the Industrial Revolution…
At the end of Mr. Foster’s unit on the Industrial Revolution, students were given several choices for the construction of their summative performance assessment. Zack chose to create a comic illustrating factory working conditions. Below is the middle section of the first draft of his comic. Analyze the comic below: The text says: I stormed downstairs to the factory when I saw the horrible conditions. The horrible conditions the kids with missing limbs the loudness the tatter cloth. I fired the evil boss for these horrible conditions and told the workers to come back in two weeks. What feedback from the teacher would help this student revise his writing for the final draft?